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[W40k Dawn of Awesome 3]

did u know w40k is useually a tabletop,,,,

"When did this happen and what motivated me to make this" maybe some psycho active stuff would explain the lightshow and what that i think it was a necro does to the seargent... but back to review...
1st i like that warhammer thing its a game that wasnt used 1000times already for a parody...
2nd how should i say... it has its own style (what it look like) of cause its a parody and they look often a bit crapy and thats okay but i think some things could be drawn in a different way just a littel bit... its only my opinion the design is okay but it could be a bit cooler...
3th sound is okay voices are fine the soundtracks maybe u could have choosen something less popular but... i guess it wasnt that big project of u to think that far...
4th story is äh yeah its short and has some simple plot but okay...

just u know i dont want to say that its bad just give u feedback and since there is nothing that is perfect its just critism what could be made better...
i have seen u have lot submissions already i only tryed it one or two times but never realy made someting but im still artist and maybe it would be good if u would more often try something out how to animate, design stuff just to get more skills like an heavy metal guitarist should can play an electric and an acoustic guitar...

i bet u already thing "what does this idiot want from me?!"...
i think ur good at this flash thing but it could be awesome if you just always try try try and keep on...
cya

Battosai810 responds:

Man that's a wall of text in need of some spellcheck.

This isn't really intended as a Flash with anything really resembling story, artistic talent, or integrity. I got a goofy voice acting clip from Dawn of War II and made a really goofy animation in like 2-3 hours from it. Watch just about any other cartoon from 2010 to see what I can actually make when I put time into it.

I'm well aware 40k is a tabletop game. I've been playing for about 6 years and I do commission miniatures painting.

[The Subway]

keep up working

i have seen realy much flash works there where many first trys of people and i must say ur is one of best first flashes i have seen so far... but of course there is much to work on no master is fallen out of the sky yet.
the design and animation are okay but will improve with experiance...
the audio its okay (much first trys didnt even have sound -.-) but maybe u should look for some sounds at the internet insted of blowing in ur mic...
most u have to work on ur storyline and that stuff cause i didnt get it what this flash realy is about :-s
dont let my rating of 6 get u down its more than most early submits gets from me but u get potencial to do better so try it

LazyCrazyLuis responds:

Thanks men, I will try to do it more better, but who know, this is my first try, i like the animations so i will learn with the time.